'Mt. Aoraki With Cherries on Top' - photo by Jim Kilgallon
Cold Comfort
Others may languish
with their sundaes
Spooning chocolate
ice cream up
Swirling their
tongues around the cold
Lapping a buttery
feeling from their lips
Dipping again for a
hit of warm chocolate
Stringing the cherry
along til the last
Then plucking it from
the taut stem
Crushing the flesh
and spitting the pit
Taking cold comfort
in that moment
I instead will sit
this blue hour away
Scooping a handful of
tall grass
Twirling it about my weary
head
Sending the night
flies spiraling away
Savoring the quiet
cool of evening air
Sweeping the field
scents over me
Until the sun is
ready to gently settle
A glowing cherry atop
yonder mountain
And drop to
stillness and a comforting chill
- SM-L 6/30/13
Oh, I really like your take on this. Loved the interplay between the two stanzas. And that second stanza, yes....I think I am with you really, I'd rather sit in some tall grass watching that 'cherry' sun set! Susan, I really think this is one of your best. Really nice!
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ReplyDeletesmiles...it was difficult to me as well...i live in that last stanza of yours...just appreciating life and watching it go by...sipping on it like a milk shake and savoring the moment....smiles....
ReplyDeleteThis is really beautiful and the photo is quite amazing. Thanks for posting this and enjoy that quiet time!
ReplyDeleteCould I bring the sundae to eat while watching that view?! I think the two together could be a winning combination!
ReplyDeleteI also thought it would be lovely for all of us to meet ... watch the sunset ... just be. Your poem and the photograph are a winning combo.
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